November 15th, 2020 
This is statement of purpose for graduate admission in Master’s of Urban and Regional Planning
Please help me edit and rewrite sentences in a more connecting way.
Paragraph 1, please help me rewrite sentences in a more descriptive, story telling, imagery way
Paragraph 2, rewrite sentences and be reflective on what I learn,
add a concluding sentences to the paragraph.
Paragraph 3, rewrite sentences and be reflective on what I learn and how I grown.
Paragraph 4, rewrite sentences and be reflective on what I learn and how I grown.
Paragraph 5, rewrite sentences and show I wanted to pursue my master degree in urban regional planning with my learning and working experiences and I want to change communities
Paragraph 6, rewrite sentences and show why ucla and my contributions to ucla
Thank you so much!
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